hello everyone, i really need someone to look at the first 2 paragraphs and give me any kind of suggestion on how to make it better. in return give me anything u want me to look over for u and give u suggestions. The paragraphs about a mother and her son and why she is a bad parent. i really sound very philosophical/smart in wording the essay.
Body paragraph 1
Use of bad behavior is a critical part of bad parenting. Darcella and Morris both display their Violence in front of Maurice countless times. To begin, Darcella and Morris only knew how to speak through violence. Maurice saw his mother stabbing his father; she stabbed Morris countless times on his arm until he was covered in blood while laying down on the floor(Schroff and Tresniowski 13). Darcella and Morris were both hot-tempered and grew as members of gangs; consequently, violence was a part of their life. Drugs are common in Maurice’s life, both his parents used drugs. Darcella began using drugs right when Maurice was born and got addicted to heroin when Maurice was an infant. Laura’s first time seeing Darcella; she describes her as a very thin woman who wore pants that went below her underwear, her clothes was very filthy, her hair was very messy and her movements were very slow. She could not register Laura’s presence although she is standing in front of her. She was half awake, half asleep(53). These are common effects of drug use, She does not care if she is using drugs in front of Maurice, as she is high in the middle of the day, and she could not comprehend what Laura was saying to her nor she cared about her appearance. Drugs and violence can affect Maurice very drastically. Children learn and adapt from their parents; as a result, Maurice is very likely to follow his parents path.
Body paragraph 2
Carelessness is a major part of bad parenting. Darcella displays her act of her carelessness countless times toward Maurice. First of all, Darcella did not show much care toward maurice since he was born. Maurice himself says that his Darcella does not care if he is out on the streets. Maurice appears and disappears as he felt; he never was questioned about his whereabouts or what he is doing, whether it is s night nor day. Maurice did not acknowledge anyone, and in turn, no one really looked out for him. He have only got two gifts amid his existence(26) . Maurice had to beg on the streets to be able to live, to survive for the next day. When Laura took Maurice to the restaurant he look at the menu and is very confused on what to order and what to eat. He never had any meals in the house, his family did not have anything in the refrigerator. He ate whatever he got his hands on. “At the dinner Maurice considered his thick menu and finally said eggs. ‘Eggs? i asked. ‘For dinner?’. Maurice sat there confused … he had no comprehension of the concepts of breakfast, lunch, dinner and. He didn't know different foods were served at different times… and he ate whatever he could get, wherever he got it”(37). Darcella’s carelessness can be very bad, if she does not know about Maurice whereabouts nor teach him basic life knowledge, Maurice is very much likely to end up uneducated and might get in trouble with the law or people.
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